高考英语写作指导-造句的两大技巧(4)

高考英语写作指导-造句的两大技巧

适当地使用一些修辞手法如比喻、夸张、排比、拟人等能更形象、更深刻地说明事理，增加文章的活力。例如： In the morning the dust hung like fog, and the sun was as red as ripe new blood. (明喻)

His daughter is the apple of his eyes. (暗喻)

An idea spoke within him, racing through his mind. (拟人)

His voice was loud enough to wake the dead. (夸张)

Many of us allow our children to eat junk, watch junk, listen to junk, talk junk, play with junk, and then we are surprised when they turn out to be social junkies. (排比)

4.恰当使用英语习语

写作时适当地使用习语、成语等也是使语言生动活泼的好办法。如：

Once a man is dead, there is no helping; you can’t rekindle the spark of life in him.

本句中的there is no helping是汉语式的英语，不符合英语的习惯说法。这里虽然用了比喻，但更改了原来的主语，句子显得罗嗦、笨拙。如果改成下面的习惯表达，句子变得既简洁又生动。

Once a man is dead, he can‘t be brought back to life.

再如The committee refused to listen to our request. 如果被改成The committee turned a deaf ear to our request. 句子生动，增加了文采。

活动教室〖〗请修改下面的短文增加句式的多样化以便使其生动、流畅。 We are terrified of death. We do not think of it, and we don’t speak of life. We don’t mourn in public. We don’t know how to console a grieving friend. In fact, we have eliminated or suppressed all the traditional rituals surrounding death.

The Victorians coped with death differently. Their funerals were elaborate. The yards of black crepe around the hearse, hired professional mourners, and its solemn procession to an ornate tomb is now a distant memory. They wore mourning jewelry. They had a complicated dress code for the grieving process. The rituals severed a psychological purpose in helping the living deal with loss.

【友情提示】

句式多样化是英语作文取得高分的灵丹妙药，请你一定要勤学苦练，掌握这一招。另外，在使用一些修辞方法和英语习语的时候，要注意尽量避免老套的比喻或尽人皆知的习语。 One careless move may lose the whole game.——一步不慎，满盘皆输。