佳作妙译
毫无疑问这幅漫画生动地描述了现代社会一种负面的但是却十分猖獗的现象:商业贿赂。由于惧怕严厉的惩罚,这个人背着一大堆贿赂用的钱落荒而逃。漫画的寓意是十分现实并发人深思的。
上图的寓意可以理解为详细阐述了在金钱冲击下职业道德的沦陷。一方面,商业贿赂对全社会造成恶劣的、毁灭性的影响。首先在贿赂行为中表现出的道德缺陷和人性弱点会破坏和污染职业道德的氛围,不良分子也会效仿。其次,行贿者将破坏公平竞争,诚信经营的商人被置于不利地位。另一方面,商业贿赂行为大多是被利益驱动的,这说明这些人对金钱没有正确的态度。没有金钱的确是万万不能的,但对待金钱,无疑需要取之有道,用之有度。 为了彻底根除贿赂这种道德败坏的行为,应该采取严厉的惩罚措施。另外,应该在公众中逐渐普及正确的金钱观。只有这样,我们才能拥有公平、健全的社会环境。
名师点评
① money used as bribery: 过去分词作定语=定语从句。
写过去分词做定语的步骤:
第一步:写成定语从句:money which is used as bribery;
第二步:省略引导词“which”和be动词“is”变成money used as bribery。
这样,一个定语从句就变成了过去分词做定语。
② damaging and destructive: 近义词叠用,押韵:头韵
③ revealed in the action of bribery: 过去分词作定语,修饰前面的moral deficiencies as well as the humanity weakness,写法参考本文点评第① 条。
④ It is true that money is indispensable: It作形式主语,真正的主语是that从句。
⑤ To eliminate the immoral behavior of…: 为了……。作目的状语。
八、城市交通
思路点拨
此图片描述的是一幅交通堵塞的场景。图片中,车一辆接着一辆地堵在街上,各种抱怨声不断。毫无疑问,这幅图反映的是城市交通的压力问题。同时,汽车过多就意味着尾气排放过多,所以这幅图同时又反映了环保和低碳问题。
第一段:描述图画;第二段:分析交通堵塞给人和环境带来的影响;第三段:建议措施。
思维拓展
建议措施部分,还可以从如下角度提出:
呼吁政府:投资完善基础设施、继续坚持限行的制度。
倡导低碳出行:步行、骑自行车。
倡导理智选择城市:人全部拥挤在大城市带来的负面影响。
高分范文
How horrible the traffic is! The picture depicts a scenario of a terrible traffic jam in the street. In fact, the traffic jam is so heavy that it is more of a parking lot than a crowded street①. Anxious passengers cannot take buses because there are few buses. Instead, the street is filled with too many private cars。
Exaggerated as it is, the phenomenon is not uncommon nowadays. With the number of private cars increasing②, traffic jams in metropolitans are bound to happen. Heavy transportation pressure in large cities may bring much inconvenience to people and exert negative impacts on the environment. On the one hand, when traffic jam happens, short distance in the past now seems to become terribly long, and drivers could do nothing but to wait. Therefore, a lot of precious time has been
wasted on the road. On the other hand, exhausted gas emitted by cars③ has increased the burden of environment and caused carbon emission, which has diverted from the concept of living a low carbon life。
Therefore, effective measures should be taken to alleviate the traffic jam. Firstly, taxes levied on the sales of private cars④ should be raised so as to restrict private car ownership rate. Secondly, public transportation such as buses and subways, which are low-carbon transportation means, should be encouraged and promoted so that we can have a smooth transportation。
佳作妙译
交通状况真是一团糟!这幅漫画描述了街上糟糕的交通堵塞的场景。实际上,交通堵塞严重到了一定程度,与其说这是一条拥挤的街道,还不如说这是一个停车场。焦急的乘客等不到数量稀少的公交车,而私家车却到处都是。 虽然这幅图有点夸张,但是当今这种现象并不罕见。私家车的增多必然产生大城市交通堵塞。大城市沉重的交通压力会给人民生活带来不便,也会对环境造成负面影响。一方面,一旦发生堵车,原来很近的路程似乎变得十分漫长,除了等没有别的办法,大量的宝贵时间被浪费在路上。另一方面,汽车排放的尾气更增加了环境的负担、导致了碳排放,这和低碳生活的理念相违背。